What I have observed with most writers is the trap of writing fluffy information rather than going directly to the point. The fear of running out of words leads one to delay going direct to the point. Research laziness is another issue that affects most writers. Write about King George III start by doing thorough research because you are writing for a more informed audience. The instructor is not a seven-year-old, he or she already knows a lot more than you so you must impress him by using facts to support your point and being organized through having a smooth flow of ideas. Avoid repetition if you tell the reader that king George married one wife and was faithful to her. Then you continue by saying, unlike his predecessors, he did not have mistresses, this emphasizing is just repeating yourself.
In the essay below, notice how the writer avoids dwelling too much on King George III's childhood, his youth, and even his family and other unnecessary information the idea is to write about a king. He focuses on King George III's tenure as a king, the things he did, his unique style of leadership, his failures and success, and even his mental status. A lazy writer would write an entire page about the young George III, ignoring the fact that he is diverting from what is expected and, in a few paragraphs, talk about King George III's reign.
King George III
England has never produced a ruler like King George III. Often called the mad king. George III is one of the most exciting figures in history. One of the most active rulers in his time, George III, despite his disabilities, has seen England and America through the French Indian war and the American Revolution.
Unlike his grandfather George II, George III actively took part in the running of Great Britain. The government was one of his great passions in life. He owed much of his involvement in politics to Princess Augusta of Saxe-Gotha, who raised him to be an active king, a ruling power, rather than a head figure. Be a King, George! His mother said. Princess Augusta tried to rule through her young son, never having a chance to be a queen herself. Her husband, Frederick, died while still holding the position of Prince of Whales.
Princess Augusta tried to rule through her son; after all, when he became king, in 1760, he was only 22. She saw the power of government slip into the hands of Parliament, during the reign of George I, and George II. This was in part a result of a lack of communication. George the Ist spoke French and made little effort to learn English, and his son George II made no effort to learn English. They were both contents to leave the workings of government to their ministers while remaining king in name only.
But now came this young George III, setting out to eradicate the deep system of ministerial power. And to fulfill the executive trust vested in him by the laws?? He wanted to take the reins of government and put the power back into the royal family. He did not elevate the ministers and Parliament entirely, but they did have to go through him whenever an important decision was to be made. Of course, the ministers did not like this new approach to things.
George III led an active life, and he enjoyed outdoor activities such as farming, horseback riding, and hunting. The previous kings had a problem with being faithful, but the new king was loyal to his wife, Charlotte of Mecklenbu-Strelitz. It is very common for English kings to have many mistresses throughout the course of their reign. Queen Charlotte was not the woman that George wanted to marry, his heart belonged to Lady Sarah Lennox, but he remained loyal to his wife even though she was not the woman he loved. George's advisor, John Stuart, Earl of Bute, advised that George not marry for love, but instead marry royalty. George followed his advice and became devoted to Queen Charlotte. He gave her six daughters and nine sons, a total of fifteen children.
George was only 26 when he had his first attack of insanity. Historians now believe that George III wasn't mad at all; he had a physical disease known as hepatic porphyria. Porphyria is a genetic metabolic anomaly. Due to the overproduction of the porphyria precursors? An increased quantity of porphobilinogen (and porphyrins) accumulates in the liver. Porphyria is chronic is hereditary, and has side effects such as delirium, hallucinations, psychoses, anxiety, irritability, confusion, and restlessness. In other words, George may have been a victim of a physical disease, but he was still a madman.
George was agitated by the colonists' reaction to the stamp act. He took their defiance personally, thinking that it was him they hated. George did not see why the colonists refused to pay this extremely low tax. He was infuriated by their subordinate behavior. His anger mounted with events such as the Boston Tea Party in 1773. Plus the battles of Lexington and Bunker Hill 1775, the Declaration of Independence in 1776, and the entrance into the war, on the colonist's side, of France, Spain, and Holland in 1778, 1779, and 1780. However, the loss of the American Revolution was not responsible for George's insanity. As I've mentioned before, George suffered from Porphyria, and although certain aggravating events in history did enrage him, they had nothing to do with his madness.
George refused to speak to America's new ambassador, John Adams. King George did not show the first signs of insanity until 1788. Such fits of insanity became the talk of England, especially……… (THIS ESSAY WAS SOURCED FROM A FREE SOURCE IN THE INTERNET AS AN EXAMPLE ONLY USE IT FOR REFERENCE PURPOSE.)
1) Now what makes this an outstanding essay?
2) What grade would you give this student?
3) Do the essay have a flow of ideas or is it confusing?
4) Write a similar essay describing president George Washington?